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Good and bad. This is the
Good and bad. This is the clearest idea that you have had as far as your blocking goes. I want you to get her a pose which does not look like she is dead. You need to find a good strong opening pose with her looking at him.
He needs to be more three quarters towards us so that we get to see his face. On the sofa you are sitting them a little bit low. Also need to at this stage to get their eye focus. Put a bit of lid in there.
When he looks over at her he needs to be looking at her.
When he leans over he needs to rolling over onto the hip. Not just moving the arm over.
The close up shot is a good shot but you need to see her roll forward on her hips. Even sitting down you are going to have her rolling forward on her hips.
The end shot where she pushes him out of the frame works ok.
You have your basic layout rough rough blocking.
Put the nuances into these poses. Get their weight working correctly.
Follow up with this idea. Only thing I want you to investigate is the opening pose of her and I want you to improve on everything else. It is getting tighter and you need to build on the ideas that you already have in here.
Its starting to come along.
Its starting to come along. She is a little bit off balance
Also you have her taller and he should be taller.
Also when she leans in i like when you lean out
Now that we have basic shots we need to work on the posing. Its basically layout posing at the moment.
With the baby I would not do anything more than something which looks like a swaddled baby.
Sitting for the womans pose. Weight on the legs, shoulders leaning, head looking up, hips tilted back, extended spine, legs a little bit separated. Then she turns.
Then she does the stand up and lean in. What you have is her spine straight. You are tilting her over and not pushing the weight. You just move as one piece.
In you reference she stands up on one leg and steps out.
He is even rougher. Think about where is the weight in these poses. Standing up you might need to act out because he has to step out and take a big step. There needs to be weight on the thigh.
Space between the hands and the body. Look at your video reference.
Do you want his at the side of the chair or in the middle.
Just ask yourself where the weight is and if you cant see it in the video reference just stand up and ask yourself where the weight is.
I want to see some personality. You now need to get in there and do the work.
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You need to get back on track
You have totally changed the shot and taken out the baby. No video reference. More notes needed. Why did I decide to change. Also I feel like this is a setback from last week. Rougher instead of going forward. Prove me wrong you did video reference. Not a lot I can comment on.
The posing there is just nothing here to work with.
I would have centered here. You can put her on a three quarters over on the left third so that he can be on the right third and then bend down and give her space. Have his back slightly towards us. Dont know why you cut.
She puts down the book. I would just have her stand up. No idea why she picks up the wine.
It does not feel like you are following the board. Go back and follow the board. The final shot she is not in the shot at all.
So you need to get back on track.
I had to get rid of the baby
I had to get rid of the baby character because the model was making the software run too slow, so I am using a book instead. It makes it more interesting than having her just drinking out of a glass and it also means i can get rid of the TV which was not really serving any function in the first place.
I am between 1 and 2 because
I am between clips 1 and 2 because they are the strongest. Out of those two I would say 2 is my favourite. it has really strong reaction between the two.Your rough boards work pretty well. I ant you to think about giving them something to be doing on the sofa. Not as obvious as they are sitting and drinking. One may be reading a book, close the book and leave. One has the remote. Give them something to be doing so that you are not just placing them on the sofa so that there is no real interaction. You could also have the guy sit down at the beginning, not have both of them sitting at the beginning. Something else that might be intriquing is maybe she is holding a baby. He is reading a book. Again you never see the baby it is just more of a bundle. Give them something that they are doing in the scene. Thats the point. I think that is going to be a lot of fun. Sketchbook 2 is good as a track but unless you can think with something that is really dramatic I would go with number two which is such a dramatic scene.
Sketchbook face is actually pretty fun. You have really pushed the face. You have really got his eye. The other thing to be aware of is the black and the shadow. But I think it is a lot of fun what you did there. Maybe a squint in the nose, but overall nice shot especially what you did with the lips there.